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Tell me a secret,
One that no one knows.
Take me through laughter,
Out of my woes.
Tell me you love me,
Give me a clue.
Show me your feelings,
The same I have for you.
Whisper sweet nothings,
Shout them, if you dare.
Convey your excitement,
For our newfound scare.
We’ll be together for decades,
Maybe stroll down the aisle?
Grow old together,
Fight once in a while.
There will come a day,
When our sentient will expire.
Our last breath will kiss us goodbye,
Our bodies will decease against our desire.
If you relinquish your soul,
To mingle with mine,
Here in our eternal slumber,
We’ll remain so divine.
One that no one knows.
Take me through laughter,
Out of my woes.
Tell me you love me,
Give me a clue.
Show me your feelings,
The same I have for you.
Whisper sweet nothings,
Shout them, if you dare.
Convey your excitement,
For our newfound scare.
We’ll be together for decades,
Maybe stroll down the aisle?
Grow old together,
Fight once in a while.
There will come a day,
When our sentient will expire.
Our last breath will kiss us goodbye,
Our bodies will decease against our desire.
If you relinquish your soul,
To mingle with mine,
Here in our eternal slumber,
We’ll remain so divine.
Number 3 . Yes - I Started With 3 .
These Lines , So Killed Me << Thought It Turned Out Okay , Though .
These Lines , So Killed Me << Thought It Turned Out Okay , Though .
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Technique ImpactI absolutely loved the message, it's beautiful, the wording just wraps around you with the thoughts of it all. It really is a great piece, the reason being why I couldn't give a full 5 stars for impact was because I love the message but with every first letter being capitalized and the punctuation being oddly spaced, I think it ever so slightly takes away from that, at least for someone like me. The poem itself, I love, I adore it, it's beautiful. But the way it's typed up, I just can't get past that, perhaps it's just me, but that's how I feel about it.